Rayanna, the very naughty mouse. Chapter 2.

I broke a promise to Daddy, my punishment was to write a 1000 word story about breaking promises and disobeying orders. I hope this shows how sorry I am.

 

Rayanna, the very naughty mouse.

Chapter 2.

Pappa mouse sat Rayanna on the floor in front of him. They were in her hollow, Pappa mouse was on her cot. “Rayanna I’m very upset that you disobeyed me again, you put yourself in danger then you put me in danger and the rest of the family. All so we could rescue you from the grimakin. I’ve told you it is dangerous in the grassland, I want you to promise you never go out there without one of the grownup mice. Promise me Rayanna.” Pappa mouse told her. Rayanna didn’t want to promise as she knew she would want to do it again but she saw her Pappa’s stern face so putting her hands behind her back, she crossed her fingers so he wouldn’t see and said, “Yes Pappa, I promise I will never go into the grassland without a grownup. I won’t disobey you again.” Rayanna looked down to the floor, she uncrossed her fingers and brought to her hands to her front as she began twiddling her fingers. Her Pappa watched her for a few seconds, he felt certain she would disobey him again.  “Rayanna, I’m warning you, DO NOT think about going out there again. You WILL NOT DISOBEY THIS ORDER. Understand me ?” Her Pappa ordered, Rayanna nodded her head. Her Pappa shook his head, he knew his naughty little girl would try to visit the grassland again. “Stand up and come here.” He instructed her, pointing to the side of him.

“Rayanna you will bend over my knees and I’m going to spank you, because I don’t believe you understand the seriousness of what you did. That grimakin could have killed you and eaten you, the bowwow’s would kill you too.” Pappa said.

“Pappa, I can run faster than them, the grassland is exciting, there’s nothing to do in our hollow.” Rayanna interrupted, stamped her paw on the floor and folded her arms. “You will do as you’re told.” Pappa mouse said, grabbing her arm, he pulled her over his knee. She had never been spanked before, her brothers and sisters had, even Mamma mouse had spankings from Pappa. He held her tail, put one leg over her legs and began spanking her. Rayanna kicked, cried, fought against her Pappa but he held her tightly. Pappa mouse spanked his little girl until her bottom turned a bright reddie brown colour. Then he stopped, lifting her up he cuddled her tightly.

“Rayanna I am deadly serious about this, disobey me and you will be getting a much more serious punishment than you’ve just had. Now you can get ready and go to bed. Mamma will bring you some supper. You will not leave your cot.” Pappa told her as Rayanna still cried. He kissed her forehead, “Pappa still loves you, I just want you safe.” Then he left her hollow. Rayanna climbed on her cot and cried into her pillow, she didn’t understand why it was such a big deal. After a while she stopped crying, rubbing her hot, sore bottom, she changed into her nightie and climbed into her cot.

 

Two days later Rayanna was left on her own in the hollow, she was bored. Suddenly she heard strange noises, she knew it was the giants, they sounded close. She crept out of the hollow, looking around for any of her family. No one was around so she scurried out, running around the massive flowers and enormous trees, she hid behind a big pot and watched the giants. It looked like they were playing, like she does with her brothers and sisters, but the giants were louder and she felt the ground pounding when they played closer. Rayanna crept closer, hiding in between the big flowers, peeking through the grass. Suddenly a huge round thing bounced towards her, she ran to hide behind a stone. One of the giants ran over, just as the giant was going to get the thing that went past her, the giant gave a screech, and before Rayanna knew what was happening, the giant got a pot and dropped it over her. Everything went black, scaring Rayanna.

She felt something go under the pot and under her then slowly she went topsy-turvy as the pot went the other way around. The giant took the top off, blinding Rayanna for a minute as the bright light shot down, as she looked up she saw lots of giants faces. They were just staring at her. Rayanna was so scared, now she wished she had obeyed her Pappa mouse, but she didn’t know what to do now, could these giants kill her like Pappa said the grimakin and bowwow’s could.

Suddenly one giant reached into the pot, trying to catch her, she kept trying to scurry away but the pot was only small. The giant caught her, holding her firmly in its big hands. The giant stood up, still holding Rayanna, when she looked down, the ground looked a long way down. All the giants gathered around her, big fingers stroking her head, poor Rayanna was petrified. She couldn’t move her body but she did feel a little safe. These giants seemed to just look at her, not try to kill her. The giant holding her opened it’s hand a bit more, Rayanna stayed still, too scared to move, as these giants ran a finger over her body. All the giants took turns to touch her, Rayanna felt herself shaking inside. The giants made some strange noises, like a cooing noise the big birds make. Then the giant holding her, bent down and put her back on the ground.

As soon as she was released Rayanna ran away as fast as possible, shaking and crying because she was so scared. She ran into the hollow straight into her Pappa. “Rayanna what’s the matter ? where have you been ?” He asked as she held him tightly, crying and shaking still. She couldn’t speak, so Pappa mouse picked her up and went to sit down with her, holding her, rocking her until she calmed down.

“Pappa, I……I…..broke my promise, I disobeyed you. I went out to the grassland, there were lots of giants playing like I do with all my brothers and sisters, but they found me and caught me. Pappa I was so scared, I thought they were going to kill me but they just wanted to touch me. Pappa they just made funny noises then they put me down again. I ran so fast, faster than I’ve ever run to get home. Pappa I’m so sorry I disobeyed you, I understand about it not being safe, but those giants were nice.” Rayanna got suddenly scared of what her Pappa what thinking. His face looked angry, so angry, he didn’t speak for a minute. “Rayanna I can’t believe you’ve disobeyed me again when I explicitly told you not to go out there again. I’m just so mad right now but more upset with you. You promised you would not do it again, you promised Rayanna. I’m just upset that you actually did this. If it was one of the other giants or those giant animals, they could have really hurt you, or even worse, they could have killed you.” Her Pappa said. “Just go to your hollow and get in your cot. I’m too upset to deal with you now.” Rayanna slowly walked to her hollow, she had really upset Pappa, and she hated seeing that he was angry and upset with her. She crawled into her cot and began crying. Crying because she had been so scared but also because she had upset her Pappa. She had never thought it would have upset him, yes he would have been mad with her but she didn’t think it would’ve made him upset, but she had made a promise to her Pappa. She would have to accept whatever punishment Pappa decided to give her. Soon her tears stopped and dried up on her face, she felt awful, sad and very very guilty and upset.

A few hours later Pappa mouse came to see her. He sat on a chair whilst Rayanna sat up on the cot. “I understand how exciting it must be for you to want to explore the outside world. But you’ve now seen the dangers that are out there. You could have really hurt yourself, or worse. I’m cross that you disobeyed me, but I’m more upset that you did it, that you broke your promise. That’s upset me so much more Rayanna. If you really wanted to go outside then you should have come to me or Mamma and we may have agreed but gone with you.” “I’m sorry Pappa, I didn’t think you would say yes, so I didn’t ask you. But I’m really, really sorry Pappa.” Rayanna said, tears brimming her eyes and slowly slid down. “Rayanna you will have 500 lines to write, you have 2 days to do them. You will have an early bedtime for a month and grounded for that month. I will be giving you a spanking but I will do it when I’m ready, and at the moment I’m still too upset to do it. I suggest you get on with your lines. They are,

“I will not break a promise and disobey an order given by my Pappa.”

Pappa got up and left the hollow, as Rayanna slowly got up, got her notepad and sat at her desk, then she started doing her lines. She deserved this punishment but she hated to know she had upset her Pappa so much. She will do anything to make things better, then her Pappa reappeared, “I still love you baby girl, I want you to know that. I will always love you.” He walked over and gave his naughty little daughter a kiss, “I love you too Pappa and I’m really sorry. “ Rayanna whispered. “I know Ray, the matters forgotten with now baby girl. Take your punishment and then we can forget about it, but it’s forgotten now, Ray. Carry on with your lines. I will spank you when I’m ready, in a day or two, and it will be a very painful spanking Rayanna. You won’t sit down for a week.” He walked away, blowing her a kiss which she caught and rubbed on her heart like they had done since she was a baby. She was forgiven. She felt her Pappa’s love even when she’s been naughty, but she will try to be good from now on. Try being the main word.

 

Word count – 1770.

 

                               

Rayanna, the very naughty mouse. Chapter 1.

 

Rayanna, the very naughty mouse.

Rayanna the littlest mouse lived at the bottom of a long, grassland, with her Pappa, Mamma, 6 sisters and 8 brothers. Plus lots of other family lived round them too. There were giant and little humans that also came to this grassland, she had spotted them going into this huge stone mountain, Pappa mouse forbid anyone going near it, saying it was very dangerous, but Rayanna was a naughty mouse and she had followed them and watched, many times. As she was the littlest mouse, she got up to more mischief, Mamma mouse said “You are the naughtiest, baddest mousie I have ever brought up.” Rayanna thought she was just the bravest, no one else had come close to the mountain.

One day when Rayanna was investigating the grassland, this giant suddenly spotted her and came very close to her. Rayanna stopped, she felt her heart pounding, she was really scared. The giant was hairy with a tail, it looked similar to her, but its hair was longer and had a big head. This head came closer and closer to her, its big black nose sniffed her. It’s sniff so strong she felt her hairs move on her body. As it came closer, Rayanna took this opportunity to dash through the giant flowers, she ran so fast in between the flowers and grassland, hopping into the mousehole to her home. Stopping to get her breath back she turned around and peeked through the mousehole again, she saw no sign of any of the giants that came into the grassland.

“Rayanna what are you up to ?” Pappa said, “Why are you so out of breath ? Have you been into the grassland ?”
Rayanna lowered her head, shaking it slowly, but Pappa bustled towards her, “Rayanna have you been watching the giants ?”
“Pappa, it wasn’t the giant humans, it was a giant that looked like us, only its hair was longer, scruffier, not smooth and silky like ours, it came close to me Pappa, its nose tried to sniff me but I ran away. What was it Pappa ?” Rayanna asked.

“Rayanna, what have I told you ? You naughty girl. That was one of the giant human friends called bowwow’s, they live in the mountain too. There are 2 of these giant bowwow’s, you do not go near them. There’s also a grimalkin, you must never go near it, do you hear me Rayanna. NEVER. Now go to your hollow, I will deal with you later. GO Rayanna.” Pappa shouted, so Rayanna, turned around and scurried away but stopped when she turned into the shaft that led to her hollow. “Rayanna I know you are still there, get into your cot and don’t move. Now.” Pappa shouted.

Rayanna huffed and pouted, she scurried down the dark shaft into her hollow and climbed into her cot. She sat up, sulking, grabbing her tail, she sucked her paw, Pappa spoils everything but she’s never seen this grimalkin he mentioned, Rayanna wondered what on earth it was but she intended on finding out.

Rayanna may think she is the bravest mouse ever, but really she was very naive and just very naughty, she thought Pappa was just telling a tale to scare her.

Rayanna stayed in her cot for a few minutes, her Pappa hadn’t come to see her so she scurried through the shafts before finding the back entrance. She stopped still, listening, looking before she scurried through the giant flowers and straight across the grassland, creeping slowly, her nose twitching, getting every sense and smell. Suddenly a black cloud went over her, a scared shiver went through her body, as this black giant sprang up and nearly pounded on her. Something shoved her out of the way, and she ended up rolling through the giant flower bed. Rayanna came to a stop and turned to see this big black giant trying to catch her Pappa.

“RAYANNA RUN.” Her Pappa shouted, as he ran in between the giant flowers, turning back, scurrying round and round. Just as Rayanna turned around she saw this black giant leap up and land on her Pappa.
“Mamma, quick, a giant has Pappa.” Rayanna shouted going into their hollow. Quick as a flash Mamma and and her Uncles scurried out and saw the grimalkin. It was toying with her Pappa, big claws swiping at him, Rayanna heard him squeak, it was a horrible sound. They needed to do something quickly.

Rayanna spotted a long stick thing, if they could push it over it might hit the giant. Rayanna shouted to some of her family, they followed more to keep her safe as she was the baby of the family.

They realised what Rayanna was going to do, so all the mice scurried up the wooden pole, getting ready to jump up and down, soon they felt the pole move and every mouse jumped away as the pole crashed down, right by the giant grimalkin.

The giant screeched terribly loud, jumping up really high and running away. Mamma reached Pappa first, he was dazed but unhurt. Quickly Pappa recovered enough for him and the family to scurry back to their hollow. Rayanna was the last mouse to reach the home.

“Rayanna are you okay ?” Pappa asked as soon as he saw her. She ran over giving her Pappa a huge hug, apologising for not listening and now she understood what dangers were outside.

“But you helped save me munchkin, I can’t thank you enough for being our naughty little mouse.” Pappa told him, hugging her tightly.